Comments on: Help! Im Desperate……?

By: Jason

Jason — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 08:09:43 +0000

Introduction:
Through time, the people of Asia have used many kinds of remedies and performed different practices to ease tensions in the body and lessen stress, but most of all relieve pain which may range from headaches to body aches and Arthritis. Herbal medicines, “Tunia”, and Acupuncture are some of the many practices that may be used today to alleviate the aches and pains of people today.
Since i really don’t know what the thesis of your paper is, i really can’t write a proper conclusion, but I hope this will get you started. You may also want to add a proper thesis to the end of this paragraph.
*EDIT* DO NOT, i repeat, DO NOT USE THE FOLLOWING IN A PAPER: I, You, They, We, etc. It is not considered proper in a research paper. I myself and writing a 5-page term paper and got points taken off my rough draft for using “you”.

By: Ski Chic

Ski Chic — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 07:57:27 +0000

opening para-
Chinese medicine has come a long way ’till today. Have you ever heard of Acupuncture, Herbal medicines or Tunia? Well these medical techniques are very old. even though technology is improved the methods are still used today and it’s very relaxing and has imidiate affect on a person.
closing para-
So now you know the miracles of Chinese medicines. Thanks to them it’s easy to get cured fast on illness of stress and gets your body soothed out. Like I said these were discovered many dynasties ago and it’s and miracle they still work today, some of the theraphies are even better than modern medicine.
(p.s. glad to help “! h@ve no !de@….=D”)

By: Trying to be positive :)

Trying to be positive :) — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 07:25:01 +0000

Hey Girly! I know your tired and desperate, but you should really write it yourself. Just take a break, relax, eat a snack, and write it when you feel less stressed!
For the intro: give background on topic
Conclusion: restate important points made in essay

By: ripped off

ripped off — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 06:27:45 +0000

Hi,
I am Chinese…hope this helps…
Starting paragraph is a preview of the main paragraphs you already wrote.
There are many types of ancient Chinese medical treatments. Three popular ones are acupuncture, herbal medicine, and tunia. Overtime, Chinese people have practiced these types of remedies for hundreds of years through many different dynasties. Today, the Chinese and many people all over the world have adopted these treatments and believe they cure illnesses.
Ending paragraph sums up everything
As time changed and evolved into the modern medicinal world, professional people have become experts by using acupuncture, herbs and other types of Chinese traditions that have been used for decades. Many people believe Medical Doctors over drug patients and now people have turned to other methods of treatments and practices that are less toxic on the body. People are looking for natural ways to cure ailments and Chinese people have shared ancient Chinese secrets!
Feel free to change anything but it will give you an idea to start!